Thank you so much! I'm flattered at your description of my style; it really means a lot to get such positive, detailed feedback. Oh, and Marko is one of my favourites, aswell! I love writing him, he's very interesting to delve into. Oh, and extremely smexy also. ;D
that was great! I loved it!
Thank you!
This was great! So far it's my favourite one-shot you've written. The thing I love most was the relationship Star has with each character. She's never been a favourite character but I enjoyed how she interacts with the other characters, especially Edgar.
There was another part I really liked. Echoing 'compact ice' in Alan's paragraph - something I saw in David's. I don't know whether you intended to do this or not but I thought it was quite effective in making David and Alan have a similarity. It felt quite sinister and I loved that. It made me see a part of Alan in a new light. If there was a story based around that idea I'd think it would very intriguing.
Thank you so much! :) I'm really glad you liked this, despite Star not being your favourite character! Oh, and the Edgar bit was one of my faves, as well. (If you want more Edgar/Star interaction, may I take the time to pimp "Establishment?" That's full of juicy Edgar/Star goodness. :D)
The compact ice thing was intentional, I'm delighted you pointed it out. The reason I added an implication of a darker side to Alan was mostly due to his fate in LB2 as a master vampire. He obviously had some potential for evil, so I threw in a more sinister side to him, in comparison to his more innocent brother.
Thanks for your indepth and flattering review!
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